a few glimpses of paradise

[ritual om]

if you want to find out what paradise feels like,check out my new track:

http://www.ic-musicmedia.com/artist_pages/...e.php?id=102661

 

comments are appreciated!

[Time_Trap]

you posted this twice :S replied in the other topic

[sundrop]

if you want to find out what paradise feels like,check out my new track:

http://www.ic-musicmedia.com/artist_pages/...e.php?id=102661

 

comments are appreciated!

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the delay on your early sounds is jumbled.

the song sounds nice but its confusing to listen to

with structure and less whiny sound throughout it would be alot more enjoyable

 

good sound quality tho

[ritual om]

don't be so bored to write something down!

[sundrop]

i was thinking about this track today.

 

there are really nice moments in it, and i imagine you had a lot of fun making it.

 

but my advice on the structure... (if you are willing to listen, i assume so, since u ask for our feedback!!)

 

IMO you could have a really great tune if you did these things:

 

- make some minimal sections, so there are builds ups to the complexity

- take out some of the whiny noise that goes on through the whole track, like around 4:00 and 6:00

- add some simple, subtle patterns to give flow and structure

- some of the delays are so short it sounds jumbly

- uplifting background pads (embracer if u use cubase)

 

give some silence so that only one sound remains ... let them float ... thats paradise to me! this would make good beach music.

 

hope my advice helps for your next track.

[ritual om]

thanks a lot!yes,most of the ideas are nice and will try to carry them out!