First electronic track

[Spinecord]

This is my first completed track, I'm just now getting into making this type of music, mostly interested in psy, goa, hard house, etc.

 

Any comments would be nice. It's a pretty short track since it's my first attempt, only 3:40.

 

http://www.speedyshare.com/140282413.html

[Veracohr]

It needs some direction. Some sort of guiding theme. There's ideas there but no real structure. Also, that saw wave thing that is pretty constant throughout--I think that would sound good if you broke it up a bit, created a rhythmic pattern with it instead of a constant sound.

[Spinecord]

Thanks for the tips! I will try that.

[CosmicEquilibrium]

It looks cool like industrial.